Explanation: Since this is the first timed write, I am offering the opportunity to revise a portion of the timed write #1 in order to increase your score on this assignment.

1. Carefully consider the feedback from your peer, my comments and the score you got based on the rubric.
2. On a separate sheet of paper (typed is fine):
-write your thesis (revise if you wish)
-rewrite ONE body paragraph from your essay--remember to focus on starting the paragraph with a claim that supports your thesis, including specific, less common textual references and explanation/analysis that explains the connection between the evidence and the claim and the evidence and your thesis.
-briefly explain what you changed and why
3. Staple the revision to the FRONT of your timed write #1 and turn back in by the end of the day on Monday, October 11th

Example of a Body Paragraph With Nice Balance of Evidence and Analysis:
The Penelopiad also portrays Odysseus as dishonest and deceitful, which aren't the characteristics you would normally associate with a hero or the protagonist. There are numerous references in The Penelopiad about how Odysseus tells extravagant stories, but the rumors show that there are two different versions of what happened, one of them is always less heroic and more cowardly and normal than the other. But the ones that Odysseus tells are the more heroic ones. For instance, the story of how Calypso is keeping Odysseus captive in her cave, and she was taking advantage of Odysseus was also told as a version where Odysseus was willingly hanging out at a whore house. This is significant to the comparison between The Odyssey and The Penelopiad because the dishonesty from Odysseus makes one question all the rest of his heroic deeds. This dishonesty also draws his faithfulness to Penelope into question, as well as whether he was really stuck at sea for twenty years or if he deliberately took his time coming home. The repeated mention of at least two different versions of the story gets at a key message conveyed by The Penelopiad: the fact that there is always more than one side to any given story and that perspective, the lens through which a text is presented to us, will inevitably shift and transform the story itself.